There it hangs, sexily,
On that stupid tree.
The Tree of Knowledge,
Or something…
The Fruit. Forbidden.
So He says.
See how it shines,
In the light of Eden!
Radiating, throbbing,
Pulsating, succulence.
How it calls to me.
Beckons and lures.
Tantalizes.
It wants to be,
Inside me!
Oh, the pain….
The AGONY!
Of wanting it.
Almost unbearable.
It’s RIGHT THERE!!!
And I so so so so want it!
Forbidden.
Yeah, right.
(I wrote this piece for poetry picnic. This week’s theme is Adam and Eve.)
Random Misanthrope 
I love this! I am so sure you have absolutely captured the essence of Eve, were she ever to have existed, and certainly her essence as she exists as a metaphor for womankind, haha. Well done!
Thank you! I love it too, which doesn’t happen very often. I usually like my work, and I dislike a lot of it too, but very rarely do I write something I’m completely happy with. This almost wrote itself.
Maybe it was so easy to write because I absolutely understand what Eve must have been thinking and feeling when there was this piece of total perfection in front of her, and she was told she could not have it.
So you’re saying women haven’t changed much sense Eve? You’re probably correct!
My offering for this first Gooseberry Garden picnic: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/21/this-eden/
I love how you turned this into an innuendo… or maybe I’m just dirty?
No more dirty than I am. That was definitely intentional. I’m glad someone picked up on it. 🙂
Your poem made me feel like Eve in the 21st century haha! Enjoyed reading. 🙂
http://softvoiceofafreespirit.blogspot.com/2011/08/birth-of-sin.html
great a modern eve ….who gets what she wants ! love it thank you
modernized story told here, enjoyed it!
Thanks for sharing…
Actually you touched on our whole trouble today, all those too enticing things we can’t leave alone to save our soul.
I like to think that Eve probably thought that expulsion from paradise was worth getting a taste of total perfection.
Well done … I very nice take on the challenge.
Isadora
Seductively sweet! lol. I loved it. Blessings 🙂
I love the dismissiveness in her attitude and her absolute desire for the fruit. Nicely modernized.
Story of Eve ..well picturised
Kitten
After reading your poem I now realize why Adam did not have a chance to say no.
Great read.
Genebrother